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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 when you are applying for a job in a company. the main ones are choosing a salary package and working under good team leaders having a good approach towards new employees.
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 with, money is the main reason why when working for someone. if you have a good technical background you will definitely get a great package. if you are an insufficient one you definitely get low ones. so,choose wisely when you choosing something.
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, you are doing some work which gives you huge amounts but you are not satisfied with your work.because you are interested in other activity. vice versa is you do what you like but paying is low.in that case money is not important. incase of a working environment in the organisation,if you are a fresher and you haven't told anything when you joined the institution,think about that situation? and oppositely you have been given guidance from the beginning up to sometimes like you reached some level where you can tell somethings to other employees.by comparing these two scenarios working environment is playing a major role. To conclude,both of them plays an important part while you are entering into a company.it is up to you to choose between those two.because you are the one who is going to work for them for a great amount of time.
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