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Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions?

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Nowadays, the pace of everyone’s life is getting faster.
As a result
, many adults find it difficult to take good care of their parents
due to
 lack of time.
This
 essay will intend to deliberate not only
problems
 but
also
 solutions in subsequent paragraphs. To open the deliberation, the first tenable aetiology is the negligence of high-quality help to the senior citizens. As in most nuclear families,
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adults are working
therefore
, they do not have spare time to pay full attention and
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 at home when their parents need
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 most
especially
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 during their old age days.
For Instance
, after
certain
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 age elders become
dependant
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 on their children even for basic needs
such
 as food, medicines and travelling whether to meet relatives or doctors
regular
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 visits. When they do not get these basic necessities on that movement when they want it. It
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 negative impacts on their brains as they
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 feeling like a burden on their families
Consequently
, seniors have become socially isolated and struggle to survive, which is leading to mental crises
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them
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and
problems
 with
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. Despite having the aforementioned
problems
 there are plausible solutions which will be beneficial for society. Mostly, working parents should teach their kids to be available and provide basic help to their grandparents in their absence.
However
, in critical cases, they should hire a full-time nurse for them.The outcome of
this
 method is that the
elder
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 can live with their children and grandchildren,
thus
 they can feel less lonely.
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the government should establish a social service program that will provide the elderly with all essential help. To illustrate, society should build a free membership club for pensioners where they can interact with the same age group. It would definitely enhance the quaint of social interaction.
Moreover
, it will improve their way of living.
Additionally
, they can learn yoga, playing cards and
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 the laughter therapy together. Certainly, these activities keep them busy
hence
, they would not feel neglected and alone. To recapitulate,the
problems
 related to limited opportunities for looking after the elderly can be solved with a number of measures
such
 as providing an adequate homely environment,
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 and health assistance.
Similarly
, the government should establish a social club where they feel cheerful and healthy.
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task response
Make sure to address all aspects of the task question, including both problems and solutions, without deviating from the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout the essay, with appropriate use of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs together.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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