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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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We are living in the 21 century,
still
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 every
country
 has
poverty
. The biggest reasons in my opinion are the economic
structure
 of the
country
 and the lack of
education
, which I will discuss in detail in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, the economic
structure
 of the
country
 makes the greatest contribution to the
country
's development and the population which lives under the
poverty
 line. Some
countries
 have the best economic
structure
,
still
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 they miss the point where to focus to reduce the number of poor
people
. In my opinion, each
country
 must have the same regulations for poor and rich
people
, where everyone has an equal right. To reduce the number of poor
people
,
countries
 should make some separate laws for considering the situation.
For example
, a
country
 can impose low TAX's on poor
people
 for the
first
 few years to give them a chance to improve their financial situation.
Secondly
,
an
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education
 makes a significant amount of impact on
poverty
. Illiterate
people
 will not be able to earn a significant amount of money to support their family needs and they will just have to rely on the labour work. They will earn by doing the labour work, but will not be able to earn enough, and they will be pressed under the burden of
poverty
 day by day. Each
country
 should have some laws regarding basic
education
.
Countries
 should provide free
education
 to encourage the
people
. To recapitulate, all
countries
 should have an economic
structure
 which
include
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 the
people
 of all financial class and must encourage the
people
 to increase the literacy rate by providing free
education
. As it is truly said, "
Education
 is the birthright of every child."
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