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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
It is argued that the numbers of
male
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 and
female
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females
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 must be the same in every
courses
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 taught in
university
. In
this
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 I am going to explain why I completely disagree with the statement and
then
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Firstly
, I believe that there are several subjects to choose
at
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university
 and some
courses
 are suitable for
male
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males
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 and others for
female
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females
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, for
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examples
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 I am a student and I am studying economics and finance where the major of
students
 are male because the girls do not want to attend these
courses
 because they do not like it. In
contraddiction
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contradiction
 , there are some subjects where there are several
female
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for instance
 the course which taught how to become a professor is full of
female
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females
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.
Moreover
, in my
opinion
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 if the
university
try
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 to accept the equal number of male and female in every subject the difference of student there will be and so
students
 need to choose whatever they want.
Although
 the
students
 can attend the course they want, in some countries it is impossible for a person to choose what to study, for
examples
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 in some
arabian
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university
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universities
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 the girl can not attend
on
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some
courses
 because it is believed that they are more suitable for men. In conclusion, I think that the
students
 have to choose the subject they want and the
university
 must give the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to attend each course the student desire without differences between male and female.
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