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shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School ‎Types Between 2000 and 2009.‎

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The statistic illustrates the monthly expense of an ordinary household in Australia ‎over a decade from 1991. Figures were measured in Australian Dollar ($).‎ Overall, each family’s total expenditure every month witnessed a marginal increase ‎throughout the surveyed period, of which Australians spent most of their money on ‎non-necessary products and services but the least on clothing. Among the six ‎measured categories, only the expense of wearable and transportation dropped ‎during the decade.‎ To be more specific, each family’s sum cost in Australia slightly increased from ‎‎$675 to $715 between 1991 and 2001. The most massive growth fall to the category ‎of electricity and water, for which the expenditure went up from $75 to %120, ‎representing a 60% growth.
By comparison
, food and housing both rose the ‎smallest amount by $5, reaching %160 and $100 respectively in 2001. The spending ‎on non-essential products and services
also
 demonstrated growth, rising from $250 ‎to %270.‎ The two items that bucked the upward trend illustrated above were clothing and ‎transport. The expense of eatables decreased by one-
third
 from $30 to $20 over the ‎decade.
Similarly
, transportation
also
 declined its spending to $45 in 2001, with a ‎reduction of about 35% compared with the 1991 figure.‎
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