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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

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There is too much debate about whether
children
 should be learned to be more competitive or cooperative members of society. In my opinion, both behaviours are important and
cooperation
 is more important than
competition
. On one hand, as we live in
the
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 very competitive society, we need to teach our
children
 the sense of
competition
 in a positive way. The most obvious advantage to encourage
competition
 among
children
 is that it makes them more creative and
open minded
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 and opens the doors for better future opportunities for them. For illustration,
children
 work hard in the study because they compete with other classmates to receive high marks,
this
 will help them to get a very good job in the future.
Moreover
, they become more independent and rely on themselves because they know that nobody else will be there to do their duties.
On the other hand
, I believe that
cooperation
 is mandatory to be encouraged for many reasons.
Firstly
,
cooperation
 helps
children
 to learn from each other.
For example
, when I was
at
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school
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 team, I learned how to play table tennis with my friends and we learn a lot of skills from each other and when we play in the final round with other school teams, we get a very good score in the final.
Secondly
,
cooperation
 teaches
children
 the skills linked to sharing,
as a result
, they become a kind
member
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 of society.
Finally
,
cooperation
 is the key component for
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 personality as well as prevent from individuality. To sum up, both
cooperation
 and
competition
 have their own advantages.
However
, I tend to think that
cooperation
 should be encouraged more in
children
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
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