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You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter: - explain why you are writing - express concern about the missing card - ask them what they intend to do Write at least 150 words.

#bank #receipt #card #envelope #head #office #concern
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my deep concern about my new credit
card
 and ask for help. Please allow me to elaborate on the situation in detail. I received a letter from your
bank
this
 morning. You are asking me to acknowledge a receipt of a new
bank
card
. The thing is, I got a letter with my
bank
card
 from UPS yesterday, but the envelope was empty. I am a platinum client of your
bank
, and my credit limit is pretty high. So, I am extremely
worring
Correct your spelling
worried
worrying
 about the possible problems I can obtain by the fact of losing the
card
. I have tried to block it on the mobile app but failed,
that is
 why I am writing a letter. Please provide me with any details about my
card
. I would
also
 like to ask you to block my
card
 to prevent possible
card
 fraud or scum of any kind. I look forward to your prompt action. Please get in touch with me as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Vasilii Rasskazov
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the logical flow of ideas is consistently clear throughout the letter. While the structure is generally good, refining the connections between paragraphs could further enhance clarity and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to demonstrate logical connections between ideas more explicitly. This will improve the overall cohesion of your letter.
task achievement
To fully meet the task's requirements, consider adding more details about how this situation has impacted you or could potentially impact you. This might include expressing concern about the security of your financial information or the inconvenience caused.
task achievement
Maintain the formal tone throughout the letter. While the tone is mostly appropriate, ensuring consistency, especially in the sign-off, can further align with the expectations of a formal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • acknowledge receipt
  • compromised security
  • unauthorized transactions
  • identity theft
  • reissue
  • secure (the account)
  • fraudulent activity
  • account holder
  • security measures
  • customer service
  • follow-up
  • discrepancy
  • escalate the issue
  • trace the delivery
  • account security
  • financial risk
  • confidential
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