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Individual can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays , all over the world , environmental protection is a big matter of concern . There are many factors leading to a bad condition of the surroundings . Some people argue that the public can do nothing to solve these issues , and only the government and big authorities can take action to reduce these problems . In my opinion , it is the duty of both to improve the conditions . I partially agree with the given statement .
To begin
 with , individuals can stop doing deforestation .
For instance
 , there are many places from where the flora is cut down to constructing factories and so on even that industries affects badly to the surroundings and leading to many problems . If the cutting of trees stoped by individuals , it will be more beneficial to the community .
Furthermore
 , they can plant more and more bushes .
Although
 there are many places where is no cultivation of crops , they can be used to plant flora for the well-being of the environment . If the greenery is spread widely , it really helps to cope up with the situation .
On the other hand
 , the government and big companies can encourage the citizens to plant trees . To illustrate, there are many ways in which they can encourage the citizens , like by providing free plants from nurseries and so on , or by holding events in which people are taught about the benefits of saving the environment .
Moreover
 , the authority can implement strict rules towards deforestation . Even though there are many people who do deforestation for their survival , it affects the habitat very badly . When the authority implements strict rules , humans will think hundred of times while cutting a tree . In conclusion,
although
 the individual can
also
 play a vital role in improving the environment by planting many saplings , the government can take actions like implementing strict rules to ensure the changes .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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