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Nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because people follow the same media. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? (Write 250 words.)

#differences #countries #people #media #trend
It is
deniable
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 that the
world
 has
been
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steadily changed through the period of time, it’s made all of the countries around the
world
 have a common interest by following the trends
media
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in media
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.
Although
 they might lose their own identity or even a
tradition
 of themselves.
While
 I am strongly convinced that the benefits for
people
 who are interested in the same thing, they will
also
 significantly connect to each other between foreign countries. The greatest benefit of following the trends
media
 give
people
understand
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the
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difference
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different
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 perspective, culture and
a
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new source that they never knew.
Moreover
, the common interesting information is encouraging
people
 to discuss with others.
For example
, once I was really interested in
E-sport
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 which is a competition on the computer by
played
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the
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 game against another team and
mainly
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 organized in the USA. Even though I do not understand the rules, the community always supported my question in the online dashboard. The lack of knowledge did not separate
people
 apart, the same interesting information connected the desire together.
However
, if
people
 keep seeking
the
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new
media
, they might lose interest in their own culture. Because no one wants to learn the old and boring
tradition
 that happened with
annual
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 year.
For instance
, in my
country
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people
 left interested in Songkran
tradition
that
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which
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 is
people
 came back to their hometown to visit their family and stayed together.
Instead
 of that, they choose to hang out with friends over the festival and
this
tradition
 will be forgotten soon.
Cultural
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 and traditional of each country become more common around the
world
 that affected by the
media
.
While
people
 lose interest in their own self, it is in fact these trends
media
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is
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that is
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 the keys for connected to each other through all country around the
world
. In
conclusion
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 it provides the ultimately advantageous than disadvantageous.
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