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some people prefer to spend thier lives doing the same things and avoiding change others, however,think that changes is always a good thing. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, Some
individuals
 prefer to spend their lives doing the same things
also
 without any challenges.
However
, starting
new
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 challenge can lead to achieving new experiences in
this
 essay I will argue both views and my own opinion. On the one hand,
fallowing
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 changes can change
human
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the human
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 mindset. It means that can help people to stand out on their own feet. And increase levels of satisfaction
for instance
 the number of individual who complete new challenges they achieve
aspect
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 of their performance
such
 as rapport or punctuality.
Nevertheless
, challenges can decrease demotivate and aid poor mindsets to improve
level
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 of
lives
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also
 desirable development.
On the other hand
, some
individuals
 prefer to do repetitive tasks.
This
 means that they try to relax and focus on their minds these activities can help to concentrate on their work.
In addition
, engaging in repetitive and routine tasks can make
individuals
 feel important. they may feel they play a crucial role in their organization or own lives.
For example
, teachers can be great instant. Over
all
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doing repetitive tasks can aid people to concentrate on their work. In my opinion,
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doing a new challenge can improve skills
such
 as communication and decrease demotivate.
But
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 I believe that focusing on one task can be better. because it leads to
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 concentration and
make
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feel
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 important. In conclusion, both views can help
individuals
 in
a special situations
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 and make
feel
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them feel
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 responsible and important person in their organization.
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