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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates how IT and
Service
 industries affected
UK’s
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 Gross Domestic Product between 1992 and 2000. Looking from an
overall
 perspective,
it is clear that
 indexes had an upward trend during the
period
. It is
also
 apparent that
IT
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the IT
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 sector made the greatest contribution to
GDP
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the GDP
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 of the UK throughout the
period
.
Firstly
, at the beginning of the
period
, the share of
IT
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the IT
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industry
 in GDP was 6%, being about 35% higher than the
Service
industry
 percentage. Afterwards, both of the sectors demonstrated a sharp increase
by
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 30% in the next
period
, experiencing a slowdown in the growth only in 1996. 1998 saw a significant rise in the numbers of
IT
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the IT
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 sector by 50%,
while
service
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the service
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industry
 slightly grew from 6% to approximately 7%.
Finally
, in 2000,
IT
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the IT
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 sector reached to 15% production rate,
being
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two times greater than
Service
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the Service
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industry
 which increased to 8%
at the end
 of the
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, period, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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