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People tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves, their families and the society so working hours should be restricted. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #hours #effect #families #society
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As the world is becoming more competent,
people
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 tend to do extra
work
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 beyond their office
hours
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 which has shown noxious results on their body conditions, personal life and as well with society because of which strict regulation must be implied on
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hours
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.
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, in my opinion,
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 would be a very good idea to take ahead as it does not only help him or her
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 but
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 keep a mentally healthy and happy family.
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 talking about the effects of long
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 as many think that they get paid more for their extra
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, in fact, in reality, they are not increasing their economy but losing their
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 which in intern might affect the economy as they end up spending more on
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 institutions.One of the main reasons for
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 to happen is that there is less physical activity works these days because there are using many machines and automation tools to do the manual
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.
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, software jobs make employees crucified to their sites for long
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.A recent survey says , there are many
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 complications that
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 go through in the software industry.
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 discussing the
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 spent on office premises
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 as at home , meeting friends or attending a family or friends gathering.In the olden ,days
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 used to complete their
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 by evening and used to spend their evenings with their families whereas now due to the computerised era ,which helps
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 to
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 from anywhere led to doing their duties all around the clock and neglecting their basic family duties or even forgetting.Because of ,
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 there will be less connectivity with the family.
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, Many families lose their evening family dinner because children or
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 at home tend to spend their
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 in front of their systems completing their tasks. In Additional to these there will be many advantages for the individuals by saving some amount of
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 from
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 which can be used for developing extra skills
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 as music,dance,cooking or even sleeping more, which provides mind relaxation.
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 culture not only helps the individuals these can
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 be a crucial decision for an organisation or government as a relaxed single person can
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 better than a person under stress.
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 is a win-win situation. In my point of view, the government must impose strict rules on working-age
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 about their duty
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,
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 will help many to avail their additional
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 with the family or utilise it to know the society around them a bit more, creating a healthy-minded individual, family and society as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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