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Some people think that teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the teenagers and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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Teenagers
in
Suggestion
at
 their leisure time should do unpaid work for the
batterment
a change for the better; progress in development
betterment
 of
society
.It is
also
 a good deed and it must be a source of joy for any teenager.Every person
have
Suggestion
has
 a passion to do something
that
Suggestion
that's
 false in the favour of
society
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the society
.
This
 unpaid work will be of any type.Like make steps to collect garbage from their
society
.Make it possible to have a required amount of greenery.Arrange some water coolers for humanity.Make it possible that
their
in or at that place
there
mst
be compelled, be necessary, have to, ought to
must
 be a feeding area for birds and animals.Like these there are
numbers
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a number
number
 of things to do for the betterment of
society
. In teenage passion to do something usually seems to be at
highest peak
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the highest peak
.If teenagers are willing to do some work without the demand of any cost and in the positive greed to make
society
 a role model
then
 it is better
then
 anything. To conclude that, I
am agree
Suggestion
agree
have agreed
 with the given statement that teenagers in their
repause
freedom from activity (work or strain or responsibility)
repose
repulse
reps
 time
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be available to do something helpful for their local community without demanding even a single penny.If they do
this
then
 we will see that our
society
 will grow up in no time.

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