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Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days
food
 often travels many miles as farmers export their
food
 around the world to satisfy consumer demand.
Although
 some people think stopping
this
 practice would benefit the economy and the environment, I believe that the negative impacts would not justify
such
 a change. The benefits of stopping the export of
food
 are twofold. In relation to the environment, transporting
food
 involves the use of thousands of lorries and many flights, which contributes to pollution given all the emissions
this
 must produce
everyday
Suggestion
every day
.
This
 negatively affects people’s health and
also
 may be leading to global warming.
In addition
 to
this
, stopping the practice will mean that people
then
 only buy local
food
, leading to a boost to local economies as farmers will become profitable as they sell more.
However
, there are downsides to
this
. A problem is that these
days many
Accept comma addition
days, many
 countries, particularly developing countries, rely on exports of their produce. Countries often have acres and acres of plantations and crops that
are only sold
Suggestion
only sell
 to foreign markets, and
this
 provides an income to the
farmers but
Accept comma addition
farmers, but
 it
also
 provides work for thousands of local people around the world working on farms.
Furthermore
, people these days have become dependent on ingredients from other countries and without it people could no longer cook or eat many of their favourite recipes and many restaurants that depend on
food
 exports may go out of business. On balance, I
therefore
 believe that the advantages do not outweigh the disadvantages. Despite the fact that it may improve the environment, the negative economic impacts on farmers who export and their employees and the
further
 impacts on
food
 choices and restaurants would be too detrimental.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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