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Some people think that printed books are no longer needed in the digital era, because all writing can be stored electronically. Others think printed books will still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Thanks to the development of technology, nowadays
people
 can store information electronically.
Books
, as an important source of knowledge, could
also
 be digitalized and stored in electronic devices.
Therefore
, some argue that
paper
books
 are no longer needed since
e-
books
 could replace them,
while
 I believe that printed
books
 are still irreplaceable. Indeed,
e-
books
 have its advantages. Compared with ordinary
paper
books
,
e-
books
 are cheaper and offer better value for money. Most importantly, it will not take too much space to store them, so it is much easier for
people
 to store and carry more ebooks. But clearly, electronic
books
 have serious drawbacks as well.
First,
e-
books
 are damaging to readers' eyesight. If someone stares at the screen for too long, it will be harmful to his or her eyesight or even cause more serious eye diseases. Fortunately, reading
paper
books
 is much less damaging to readers’ eyesight.
Therefore
, it is
also
 an effective way to rest one's eyes and protect them from being harmed by radiation from a screen.
Also
, reading
e-
books
 might decrease
people
’s interest in reading. Recent studies have shown that
people
 will be less enthusiastic about what they are doing when staring at a screen for a long time.
Also
, compared with
paper
books
,
e-
books
 are more likely to be intangible, so
people
's interest may drop when they are not able to touch them by hand.
In contrast
,
paper
books
 are tangible and readers could be more relaxed when reading them. Imagine you are sitting on a comfortable couch, reading a
paper
 book in the soft sunlight, so it will be more attractive for readers to read
paper
books
. In conclusion, no matter how advantageous
e-
books
 are,
paper
books
 will still remain irreplaceable in our lives.
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task achievement
Be sure to discuss both views comprehensively; the essay appears to favor printed books without fully exploring the benefits of e-books.
coherence cohesion
Work on varying sentence structures to enhance readability and interest.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your points, particularly when discussing the role of printed books.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to better link your paragraphs and ideas together.
task achievement
Balance the essay by dedicating a similar amount of discussion and analysis to each viewpoint before providing your opinion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized access
  • carry thousands of books in a single device
  • eliminating the need for physical storage space
  • environmentally friendly
  • reduce the carbon footprint
  • adjustable font sizes
  • integrated dictionaries
  • enhance the reading experience
  • tangible experience
  • distinct smell of paper
  • do not rely on electronic devices
  • battery life or device malfunctions
  • perception of greater legitimacy and trustworthiness
  • academic circles
  • extensive reading materials
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