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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Fees for higher education are expensive and not affordable for everyone
so according
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so, according
 to some
university
 should be free for all people regardless of their background. In my opinion, I agree that
university
 education ought to be free as it will greatly benefit both individuals and the society. A good reason to abolish
university
 fees is that it gives
people whether
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people, whether
 they are rich or poor equal rights. At present, students from poor background are prevented from entering
university
 because they are unable to afford the fees.
This
 excludes
large proportion
Suggestion
a large proportion
 of society and is discriminatory which can be avoided by getting rid of tuition fees. Another point to consider is that having no fees at the
university
 means that students will no longer have to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs.
For example
, around three quarters of all students in the UK have to work either full-time or part-time while studying at the
university
 to pay their fees. Free higher education should,
therefore
, produce better results as students will be able afford to apply themselves to their studies exclusively
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