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The chart below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts depict per cent of the average money spent by some families over 30 years.
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 line graph depicts a comparison between fast food and general restaurants for the number of
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 consumed from 1970 to 2000. It is clear from the graphs that the proportion of home
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 dropped rapidly until it reached 50% in 2000. At the same moment, restaurant
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 increased to half of the consumption.
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, both fast food and general
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 rose gradually for the whole period.
According to
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 what is shown in the pie charts, from 1980 to 1990 home cooking decreased by 20 per cent to 65%.
Then
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, there was a slight descent in 1990 by 15%.
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, it reached the lowest point at 50% which was a similar rate to taking
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 at restaurants. As can be seen in the line graph, both fast food and sit-down restaurant
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 went up, and they got the same number of
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 in 1985 approximately 40%.
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, they increased dramatically to reach about 85% and 50% respectively in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depict" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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