Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

In the twenty-
first
century, everybody understands the importance of exercise but sadly due to a hectic lifestyle very
fewer
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few
little
least
less
people are engaging themselves in physical
activity
which is resulting in a lot of
health
problems. In my view, lack of
health
 as a priority and busy lifestyle are the root cause of the problem which I will explain in detail in upcoming sections. Today our younger generation is very busy making their ends meet in
such
a way that they do not have enough time for their own bodies. They are so much engrossed in their daily
office
home routine that they stop listening to the demand of their own body. But
this
attitude is very risky in the long run as it leads to a very unhealthy society which overall impacts our nation's
health
as well. In other cases, if people have
time
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the time
, they try to spend more of their leisure time in front of an idiot box rather than in the field or in the gym.
This
attitude shows that any kind of physical
activity
is least on their priority list. Another trend which is more shocking is that they are setting
this
example in front of their children which is our country's future. The need for an hour is to give our
body their
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bodies, their
bodies their
due respect and start working on it which I will discuss in
further
section. As discussed above the majority of people are not able to do workouts due to their busy
office
schedule
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schedule, hence
hence
, we need to find a solution in the offices only. Nowadays lots of offices are coming with interesting concepts of gymnasium, yoga classes
,
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,
Zumba classes and so on. I would recommend offices should make enrolling in any of the physical activities compulsory to its employees. In
this
way, employee
health
will definitely improve which will benefit the
office
in the long run as well. If physical
activity
is not possible during
office
hours, people should try to engage themselves in some form of physical
activity
which can be as simple as walking for 30 to 60 minutes outside of their working hours to improve their
health
. I think if we give some priority to our body by doing any form of physical
activity
, we can improve overall
health
of our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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