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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.

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Dear Mr George, I am writing to express my interest in working at our company headquarters in the United Kingdom for a few months to
further
 enhance my skills and get exposure to the global market trends of our products so that I can better contribute to my company and carry out my responsibilities more efficiently. As you know, I have been recently promoted to the assistant product manager post and I am working hard to collaborate with my team to enhance the sales and increase our brand reputation.
However
, I have been feeling the need to meet and
work
 with our global team members and attend some training sessions that our head
office
 in London arranges frequently. I am quite positive that the opportunity to
work
 in our company’s head
office
 for six months will
further
 enhance my knowledge and give me an exposure to the global market trend. I have talked to Julian and he has agreed to take up my responsibilities during my absence.
Furthermore
, I will check my emails daily, and be available for emergency phone calls. Once I get back to the
office
, I would endeavour to
work
 extra hours in order to catch up on anything I had missed.
Finally
, I would need your support to get
approval so
Accept comma addition
approval, so
 that I can
work
 in our company’s head
office
 for six months and fulfil the objectives. I look forward to your positive reply.
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