The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions.
The given table illustrates the count (in millions) of
people
who’s
visited to watch four different genres of Unnecessary verb
who
movies
at the cinemas in four different counties.
Firstly
, much more people
preferred to watch action
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
movies
. Romance
type was the
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their
second
choice by them. However
, rest
of the two types Correct article usage
the rest
were become
famous Change to the active voice
became
have become
in
less than 20 million Change preposition
to
people
.
Secondly
, movie lovers from India showed huge
interest in Correct article usage
a huge
action
movies
, whereas
, many of
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apply
the
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apply
people
showed an
interest to attend Remove the article
apply
romance
movies
. Similarly
, most of
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apply
the
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apply
people
from Ireland get enjoyed by
watching Change preposition
apply
the
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apply
action
films. The least number of people
such
as 3.8 million decided to watch romance
movies
.
Moreover
, large
number of individuals from Change the article
a large
the large
the
New Zealand and Japan were Correct article usage
apply
also
interested in watching action genre
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action-genre
movies
. However
, the count of romance
movie lovers was Replace the word
romantic
same
for both these countries. Correct article usage
the same
People
from the
New Zealand interested in horror Correct article usage
apply
movies
were almost half than
the Change preposition
of
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number of Japanase
Japanase
.
In conclusion, much more individuals were interested to watch Correct your spelling
Japanese
the
horror Correct article usage
apply
movies
. However
, rest
of the population Correct article usage
the rest
were
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apply
choosed
other Correct your spelling
choose
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
movies
as source
of enjoyment including Add an article
a source
romance
, comedy and horror.Submitted by innocentkiran990 on
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