Some
people
think that professional
athletes
serve as positive
role
models
for young
people
and some
people
think that they serve as negative
role
models
. I will talk about two opinions and
then
I make a conclusion.
FirstChange the article
show examples
opinion
is that professional
athletes
serve as positive
role
models
for young
people
. If we omit overwork, injury and stress,
then
of course we can say that they serve as positive
role
models
.
Sport
is a good thing for health, you improve your body,
improveCorrect word choice
show examples
health of some
yourChange preposition
show examples
organs and professional
athletes
showsChange the verb form
show examples
that you can do it. You
also
can take part in competitions, win
the Correct article usage
show examples
prizes and be strong and fast, but it is not
onlyAdd an article
show examples
reason why
sport
is good for you. Some
people
use
sport
as a thing that can relieve stress. They
don’t
take part in competitions, they
don’t
compete with someone. They do
sport
just
forChange preposition
show examples
maintain health and for peace.
SecondChange the article
show examples
opinion
is that professional
athletesChange noun form
show examples
behaviour
can have negative influences. Part of
this
opinion
is correct. Not all
people
have good
behaviour
. Include professional
athletes
. Some of the
athletes
substitute others, go to tricks,
behaveCorrect word choice
show examples
immorally. And young
people
can think that it is
the Correct article usage
show examples
normal
behaviour
. But these thoughts already depend on upbringing. But if we talk about
athletes
, that
don’t
mercy themselves and train to exhaustion,
then
this
is
also
bad, because you need to have rest too. You need to work, to prepare, to train, but
and Correct word choice
show examples
don’t
forget about free time, about rest, because without them you can get
overworkWrong verb form
show examples
and
then
you won’t improve yourself, just destroy yourself.
I can’t say that one of the opinions is incorrect. Both opinions take place. Positive or negative
role
depends
ofChange preposition
show examples
athleteCorrect article usage
show examples
that
youngCorrect article usage
show examples
person
likeReplace the word
show examples
and what managers or who is the main
person
ofChange preposition
show examples
sport
do with
athletes
whichCorrect pronoun usage
show examples
brokeWrong verb form
show examples
rulesCorrect article usage
show examples
. Some of them just turn a blind eye to their failures and continue to
promoteCorrect pronoun usage
show examples
, so some
of Change preposition
show examples
young
peoplesFix the agreement mistake
show examples
can get
wrongChange the article
show examples
opinion
about
sportFix the agreement mistake
show examples
and
behaviour
in the
sport
. But I can say that
firstCorrect article usage
show examples
opinion
is more correct
Change preposition
show examples
thatCorrect determiner usage
show examples
second,
because little of
athletes
is
amoralAdd an article
show examples
person
and young
people
see their progress, see that
sport
can be interesting and what the result will be
,Remove the comma
show examples
if they decide to do some kind of
sport
. We can’t do anything with
badAdd an article
show examples
personFix the agreement mistake
show examples
, just defeat them in competitions without tricks and protect
yourselfCorrect pronoun usage
show examples
,
also
set them as an example of bad
behaviorChange the spelling
show examples
.