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The table below gives information about the production of cocoa beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998.

The table below gives information about the production of cocoa beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998.
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The given tabular chart illustrates
the
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information about
cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
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bean
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 manufacturing in six areas from 1992 and 1998 and measures the quantity in
tons
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
production
 of
cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
 inclined in all parts except England and
Africa
. It can be seen that cultivation of
cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
 was less in North and
central
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America
 than
other
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in other
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 regions.
To begin
 with, during 1992, the
production
 of
cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
 was maximum in South
America
 which accounted for 1,43,000
tons
, only 29,000
tons
 of
production
 was made in
Africa
. The amount of
production
 in England was 10,000
tons
 more than
North
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in North
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 and
central
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America
. It is interesting to note that
equal
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 amount of
cocao
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cocoa
cacao
beans
were
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 cultivated by North and
central
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America
 during
first
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 and
last
 year. Probing
further
,
Africa
 experienced a rising trend till 1996 and manufacturing reached
at
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1,19,000
tons
 ;
however
, in
next
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the next
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 two years, the
production
 remained
only
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by only
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 a quarter. Surprisingly,
production
Africa
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in Africa
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, Asia and Oceania followed
a
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an
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 increasing trend over time and reached
at
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4,36,000
tons
, 76890
tons
 and 3,89,000
tons
 respectively up to 1998. There
was
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 67,000
tons
 of manufacturing in England during 1994 but in another 4
years
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 it dropped by 18,000
tons
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cocao, beans, tons, production, africa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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