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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 diagram demonstrates the process of
wave-energy
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a wave-energy
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 engine and its localization.
Overall
, there are two options for the energy output apparatus instalment in which deeper
water
 is more expensive compared to shallow
water
.
Machine
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A machine
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 located in the shallow end is low cost because it produces less energy and uses smaller waves.
However
, the
machine
 placed
further
 into the
water
,
although
,more expensive,
but
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production volume is significantly higher. There are several steps involved in producing electricity through
wave-energy
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the wave-energy
a wave-energy
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machine
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machines
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. First, the
water
 current goes through a
cylinder shaped
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cylinder-shaped
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machine
 with an opening at the bottom end.
This
 manoeuvre flows air through a chamber from top and bottom pushing on a
fan like
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fan-like
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device
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a device
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 called a turbine.
This
 operation energizes the fans of the turbine
at
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and at
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 the same time generates energy on
the
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one side
,
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while
 releasing air on the opposite end.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, machine with synonyms.
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