the pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000

the pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000
The two pie charts illustrate changes in
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the population
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of different areas of the world between 1900 and 2000.
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represents
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a tremendous increase
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the world’s population, from 1,6
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to 6 billion in just one century. Asia as a region was the most populated
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the smallest number of people lived in Africa. In
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, the ratio of Asian and European regions declined over the century. Europe’s ratio dropped from 25% to 14%,
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Asia declined from 60% to 54%. From 1900 to 2000, the percentage of people living in Africa more than doubled from 4.5% to 10%,
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Latin America’s proportion almost tripled in the same period. North America’s percentage
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, remained constant at 5% in 1900 and 2000. The Middle East and North Africa, a new category in 2000, represented 6% of
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population.
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