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It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheapers clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#clothes #lots #cheapers
Nowadays, all over the world, the topic of buying
clothes
 is omnipresent.
While
 some
people
 think the
advantages
 of buying a few expensive
clothes
 exist, other
people
 think there are
advantages
of
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 buying a lot of cheaper
clothes
. From my point of view, I disagree with
this
 perspective for the reasons discussed below. On the one hand, as far as buying few expensive
clothes
 is concerned,
firstly
, to a large extent, especially in modern times, no matter where in the world you live, you can look fancy
due to
 the
fact
 that you bought expensive
clothes
 resulting in having a good
clothes
’ shapes with nice colours.
In addition
, at least to some degree, you can save the planet in reason of the
fact
 that you do not
overconsummate
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over consummate
.
On the other hand
, there are
advantages
 of buying a lot of cheaper
clothes
, first and foremost, by and large, when you buy cheaper
clothes
, you can spend money
in
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 other projects in order to
buying
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 reasonably, leading to being less exigent with the fashion trend.
Secondly
, and most importantly for me, you can have a variety of
clothes
 owing to the
fact
 that you wearing many different items, resulting in having your own style.
For example
, some
people
 arrive at the party and have the same expensive dress as another guest in the room,
due to
 the
fact
 that you have many
clothes
, you can compose and match with your own style, resulting in being unique. In conclusion,
while
 some
people
 think that buying a few expensive
clothes
 has many
advantages
, other
people
 say there are
advantages
 to buying a lot of
cheaper
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clothes
.
However
, In my opinion, to some extent, I disagree with these perspectives for the above-mentioned reasons.
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