More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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of minors are achieving obesity in developed countries. So it has become an alarming issue in rich countries. In

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love to eat fast

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a lot which is the main cause of obesity. Many fast

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, minors are so attached to their game screen that, they often gain weight by sitting in a gaming chair

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, in Australia gets falls victim to heart attack at the age of 10 to 16.

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the children to eat healthy. Including more vegetables in their diet and

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, my niece has reduced 50 kilos of weight by removing carbohydrates meats and fast

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from her diet.

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, doing regular physical exercise could bring the best results.

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regularly or playing or walking in the fields helps younglings lose belly fat and keep their body slim.

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, I would argue that, It is of paramount importance to keep fit, as healthy citizens are the future for making a country rich. So,

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in those countries should be nurtured properly and their parents should take good care of themselves

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
calorie intake
sedentary lifestyle
nutritional understanding
overfeeding
convenience over nutrition
electronic devices
dietary choices
self-esteem
medical expenditure
academic success

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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?