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The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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Nowadays, if we stop to study the evolution of the
countries
,
and
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this
 evolution can be demonstrated in numbers of
population
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the population
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, and agrarian
area
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areas
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. An important thing that shows the evolution of one
provincial
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province
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 is your Forest
Area
.
First
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 when we have started to think about the Forested Land
since
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from
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 1990 until 2005, it's possible
realize
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to realize
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 that some
countries
 had
a
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significant development, but
on the other hand
, other
countries
 had a horrible decrease. 
Second
,
for example
 of these are Asia and Europe were the only
countries
 that had increased in Forest
Area
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Areas
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,
in
addition
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,addition
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 South America was the country with
most
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the most
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 decreased, followed by Africa.  In conclusion, some reasons
of
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for
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 the
decreased
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decrease
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of
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in
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the
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Forest
Area
 in some
countries
,
is
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are
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 the devastation of
the
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nature, fire wide,
animal
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and animal
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 extinction. The human being didn't take care of
the
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nature like
being
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necessary and
this
 bad
using
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use
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 and uncontrolled devastation kills
the
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nature in these
countries
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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