Some people say that schools should teach good behavior to children and introduce them to right and wrong. Parents should not only be the ones responsible. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It has been debated by major
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of society that teachers are equally responsible as parents.Teachers should help
children
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good habits. I firmly agree with the viewpoint and will explain my perspective in upcoming paragraphs.
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and foremost reason is that
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home for a child.They
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school
.Mentors not only teaches them how to get good habits but
also
advises them how to become a good person.
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building their senses and
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whatever
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teaches.
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recognises
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and weakness of students and give more
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children
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weakness.
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, teachers should help
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the
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values
,cognitive skills and social
values
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, there has been a study done in "
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" which illustrated that 80%
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in
school
and whatever habits they are learning are mostly from schools or peers.
Besides
this
, parents are
also
responsible.
However
, because of their demanding jobs , they are unable to focus on their
children
.They
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have enough
time
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and social
values
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to
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the best ever schools where
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can teach them good
values
and skills.
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,
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certain acts of family members like how loud they are,emotional stability,etc .
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why
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should give more
time
to
children
. In conclusion, having mulled over
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place to learn
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duty of
school
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to guide
children
on the right path.
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