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government should make free medical and education facilities

#government #education #facilities
In
recent past
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the recent past
, some people believe that education and medical facilities should be provided by the
government
 while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that people should pay these expenditures themselves to support
country
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the country
. In my opinion, these facilities should not be free and in
this
 essay, I will propose
logical example
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a logical example
 for the same. On one hand,
government
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the government
generate
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generates
 revenue from each and every product sold in the market. Employee have to pay taxes
from
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for
 their salary and often these taxes are high.
For example
, my father is a
government
 employee and he
have
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has
 to pay
different kind
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a different kind
different kinds
 of taxes to the
government
such
 as central and state
government
 tax. Earlier, there was transparency of the fund collected but in recent times it has changed.
Moreover
, the revenue created is quite large and can be used
to
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for
 capitalized
healthcare
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health care
 and education fees.
On the other hand
, to maintain a good and prosperous
economy
Accept comma addition
economy, government
government
 should have enough funds and by providing free facilities it will cost the
government
 a ton load of money. It can get collapse if not managed well.
For instance
, in Nigeria the
government
 tried to implement
this
 kind of scheme which was intended to provide basic amenities,
however
, the
government
 was not able to sustain with
such
 work load and money pressure.
Furthermore
,
government
have
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has
 to maintain a balance in in allocating its funds
such
 as to fund the military and to invest in new technology. To encapsulate, it seems logical to demand
healthcare
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health care
 and education for public at free of
cost but
Accept comma addition
cost, but
government
have
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has
 to work for other aspects of the country as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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