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Some people believe arts subjects such as literature and music have little importance in schools today. To what extent do you agree with this?

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People in the field of education have always divided opinion regarding arts and practical subjects. Which one of these strategies of learning is more useful for pupils? Today that debate continues because the world and society are actively developing and education sector is altered quickly by various new technologies. Because of
this
 fact, a lot of schools pay more attention to practical subjects than
to
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in
 the arts. As I mentioned above,
achievements
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the achievements
 of the modern world have affected on education and
art
 has lost its importance. But it is
also
 widely believed that arts subjects are very useful and they are beneficial effect on students’ consciousness.
For instance
, subjects
such
 as literature, painting, theatre and other kinds of craft skills can help pupils to appreciate the power of aesthetic, to develop spiritually.
Furthermore
,
art
 offers a huge range of careers, that’s why any student can connect his future with
arts
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the arts
.
On the other hand
, there is an opinion which says that the
art
 subjects are impractical today because
modern world
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the modern world
 is full of economic and environmental threats. But it can
also
 be argued because a person can combine practical science and creative skills, he can spend more vital time on science, and
also
 have some
art
 hobby. It can help to become a versatile personality. In conclusion, I think that arts and practical subjects should be egalitarian. People have to stop clashes between abstract concepts and concrete facts.
Besides
, schools should devote more study time to learning various kinds of craft and arts, because it will aid students to appreciate the power of aesthetic and sophistication.
Submitted by Ольга Винокурова on

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