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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart gives data about time (billion minutes)
spend
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spent
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 on
telephone
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the telephone
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 in the UK divided into three categories including national
and
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apply
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international, and local using fixed
lines
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 and all calls by mobile devices. From an
overall
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 perspective, cellphone calls and
also
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 national and international calls from fixed
lines
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 had
steady
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a steady
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 rise during the time period.
On the other hand
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, the bar related to local calls by fixed
lines
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represent
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represents
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 a curve diagram which
it
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apply
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climb
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 between 1995 and 1999,
then
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 it decreased over a three-year course to 2002. Looking at details, the mobile calls give a sharp regression growth from the
begining
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beginning
 until the end point of
survey
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the survey
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, but national and international calls made by fixed
lines
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 had a gradual increase.
According to
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 the chart, the
think
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thing
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 to point out is that all three categories
keeped
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kept
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 their places
unlike
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, unlike
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 the
menioned
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mentioned
 changes during the time period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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