Today people have unhealthy diets and do not exercise. What do you think why it is so. What are the reasons? Suggest some solutions for solving this situation.
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thing
this
contemporary world, People
do not have enough time
to exercise
and have unhealthy diets. In this
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discuss Change the capitalization
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this
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work
daily
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basis
a
better life. Because of Add the preposition
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people
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exercise
and they even do not have time
to make healthy breakfast or dinner for themself Because of
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people
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rely
fastfood
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fast food
such
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.
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and burger
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the historical
people
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devices
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people
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any think.
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into doing
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, In this
busy life
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life,
people
do have unhealthy diets because of fastfood
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fast food
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habits
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people
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their health
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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