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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic: News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 254 words.

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News
 both in print media and in television should reflect the authentic, unbiased and important
news
 for the audiences and that
news
 play an important role in terms of educating
people
, informing
people
 about the current world and giving them an insight
of
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 political and social view. But sadly
this
 is always not the case and
news
editors
 are often broadcast and publish biased and politically influenced
news
 that does more harm than good to
the
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society. There are various
reasons
 for that.
First
 of all the personal views and political biasedness are two important factors that cause
this
 problem. Newspapers and TV
news
 should ideally be two great media to reach
the
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people
 with
the
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real and authentic
news
.
People
 greatly rely on these media to get updates on events and current affairs and the impartial and biased
news
 misleads them often. Often political views of
editors
 and their link to a particular political party lead to
this
 problem. It is not uncommon that a chief editor gets appointed to the position by the powerful political party and he is expected to present
news
 in favour of
this
 party.
Second
, in many countries
government
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 impose strict rules on what type of
news
 can be presented to the public and that
also
 causes problems in terms of fair and accurate
news
 presenting. In many cases, money and corruption are involved
for
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such
heinous
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 act. Again, many newspapers heavily rely on other renowned newspapers and
internet
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 for current
news
 and if the source is corrupted, that leads to the case of printing and broadcasting impartial and misleading
news
. The personal threat, political
reasons
, power, greed, pressure and personal gains, business are the main
reasons
editors
 sometimes decide what to broadcast and what to print. I would not agree with the notion that we are used to
the
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bad
news
 as I have witnessed many cases when
a good
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good news
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news
 gets more attention and audience than bad
news
. It’s true that bad
news
 is by
their
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 nature is appealing to
people
, but as a whole, we want to know about the true happening. Good or bad,
people
 want to learn the truth. Often
people
’s attention can be achieved by publishing and broadcasting bad and negative
news
, but
this
 is now always the truth as events like a peace treaty, world cup, noble contributions, achievements, good deeds and the political positive decision get more readers and viewers than bad
news
. In conclusion, we are not used to the bad
news
 and
editors
 do decide which
news
 to be reached to the public or not based on their personal, business and political
reasons
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