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The chart below give information about the high-speed continuous internet connection of households in five countries 2001 and 2002.

The chart below give information about the high-speed continuous internet connection of households in five countries 2001 and 2002.
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The graph compares the high-speed continuous
internet
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 connection of households in five different
countries
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 in 2001 and 2002.
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of continuous
internet
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connections
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 in the
USA
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 increased significantly from 2001 to 2002,and the
figure
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 for the
percentage
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 change in Britain increased higher than the other four
countries
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. in 2001,the
number
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 of continuous
internet
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connections
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 in South Korea was 122 which is higher than the other four
countries
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,
meanwhile
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 the
number
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 of continuous
internet
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connections
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 was 93 in the
USA
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 .
by contrast
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, the
number
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 of continuous
internet
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connections
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 in the
USA
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 increased to 251.1 in the 2002 and overpass the
number
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 in South Korea.
while
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 the
figure
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 for the
percentage
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 change in these two
countries
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 at 170 in the
USA
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,at 20 in south korea . from 2001 to 2002, the
number
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 of the high-speed continuous
internet
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 connection in the other three
countries
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 increased much more slowly .in Germany,the
number
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 from 3.4 up to 5.616, the
figure
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 for the
percentage
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 change in Germany was 80 ,and the
number
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 was 3,6 in 2001 up to 7.92 in Switzerland.the
number
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 increased from 3.6 to 7.92 in Britain in 2002,
however
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 ,the
figure
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 for the
percentage
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 in Britain was the largest among these
countries
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, countries, number, connections, usa, figure, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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