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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

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The
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 of nuclear
power
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 has become one of the most debated topics in the
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 century. Some people are against the
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 of nuclear
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 its potentially destructive effects, like 8 decades ago in Japan.
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 others, taking into consideration many benefits of nuclear
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 like its low cost, green energy and potential to
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 world peace, claim that the pluses exceed the drawbacks. I strongly that there are more advantages to nuclear
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 than disadvantages.
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, nuclear
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 can be helpful for industrial purposes.
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, nuclear
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 can be used to produce hydrogen through processes like high-temperature electrolysis or thermochemical water splitting which can be helpful in the fields like chemistry.
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, it is used in the field of medicine where using nuclear technology doctors can save multiple lives by identifying and destroying cancer cells.
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, nuclear
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 has a small carbon footprint compared to alternatives like fossil fuels. Nuclear
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 provides cheap and clean energy without emitting any harmful gases into the atmosphere.
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, burning fossil in a large scale for factories and other type of industrial purposes can lead to many types of ecological problems.
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,
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 high emissions of carbon into the atmosphere from factories and automobiles, we have a problem of global warming, which is a threat to our living on
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 planet. In conclusion, I contend that the
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 of nuclear
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 gives us lots of benefits in
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multiple industrial fields and can be the most effective way of producing energy. So I think nations should
use
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 them even more.

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coherence cohesion
The essay provides a general argument supporting the use of nuclear power, but it lacks a clear structure and detailed examples. The connection between the ideas could be strengthened with better transitions and cohesive devices.
task achievement
The response to the task is relevant but underdeveloped. There needs to be a balance of idea development and an equal discussion of both the benefits and disadvantages of nuclear technology to fully address the task. Include a clearer position that covers both sides to meet the requirements of the prompt.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrence
  • Mutually assured destruction
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Cost-effective
  • Radiation therapy
  • Proliferation
  • Rogue states
  • Radioactive waste disposal
  • Catastrophic accidents
  • Climate change
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