Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people believe that
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there are
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rights of
art
creators to convey their ideas whenever they want
while
being free from
government
restrictions.
However
, in my point of view, I don't agree with
this
because there are circumstances that need to be limited by the
government
. First of all, not all
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artistic
creations can be beneficial to the general public. The boundaries of artistic creation are
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to
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define
defined
and the point of view is often subjective and not always positive or
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thought-provoking
, bringing benefits to others. The works of some so-called
art
creators are more of a realistic representation of their own ideas and do not necessarily represent the reality of the situation, and many of them may be filled with negative energy or orientation, which may mislead people and put some of them into a
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dilemma
. Like in some war conflicts and
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,
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artists
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oriented works to support the camp they belong to.
Therefore
, the
government
needs to play a role in limiting.
Secondly
, the audience for a work of
art
is sometimes targeted. The ideas that the
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artist
wants to
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express
are often niche, targeted ,
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and not
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for the masses.
For example
, considering the grading of movies, some war movies, works of
art
created for anti-war purposes, will have a lot
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the reality of the cruelty of war shown in them, but some scenes are not suitable for people of some age groups to watch.
Thus
, the
government
should impose restrictions on the dissemination of
such
artistic creations as movies and television. In
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, since not all artistic creations have
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effect on the public and are directed to a specific
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audience
, for the benefit of the general public, the
government
should play a certain restrictive and regulatory role
while
ensuring an
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enlightened
degree of tolerance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of expression
  • Censorship
  • Artistic integrity
  • Cultural identity
  • Social responsibility
  • Public order
  • Discrimination
  • Hate speech
  • Self-regulation
  • Government intervention
  • Vulnerable groups
  • Creativity
  • Democracy
  • Fundamental right
  • Moral obligation
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