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the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

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The chart gives some data about the per cent of the unemployment condition in Australia in 2012 with 4 quarters. The chart illustrates both rural and urban
areas
. Overall, units are measured with the percentage. Generally, the show of the rural
areas
 outnumbered the urban
areas
,
nevertheless
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 both fluctuated. The minimum per cent belonged to the urban
areas
 With regards to the countryside, the high rate was appreciated just over six in every
one
 hundred in the
first
 quarter,
in
contrast
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 the
least
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 pointer of the village was appreciated with five in every
one
 hundred in the fourth term. In terms of the city, the pointers of the
first
 and the
third
 quarters were relatively similar,
however
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 the least percentage was illustrated in the
third
 quarter approximately just over two in every
one
 hundred,
on the
contrary
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 the indexes of both rural and urban
areas
 were closer in the fourth and the high rate belonged to rural
areas
 with 5%, the other was appreciated with just under five in every
one
 hundred.
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