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Some people believe that the extinction of animal species is a natural process and humans should not intervene. Do you agree or disagree?

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It has been believed that the animal’s extinction is part of the
planet
 process of evolution. Despite it, animals are an important element on our
planet
, not just
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 the environmental side but
also
 in our agriculture process. As a start, they are part of our environment by helping the natural process of
live
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 and plantation growth. While they move around as the
seasons
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changes
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 during the year, they are
also
 moving seed and vegetation along with them as they migrate from one place to another. Take giraffes as an example, they eat the leaves on the top of the trees and that the same time they are assisting the tree to generate new leaves while
seed
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fall
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 on the ground for
new
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tree
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 to
grown
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 there. By increasing the flora of our
planet
, we would
also
 have an improvement on our air quality as vegetation can absolve carbon dioxane,
what
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 is one of the main factors
on
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 global warming.
Furthermore
, the plantation is
also
 affected by the animals’ relocation. Even
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thought
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, they could eat some of
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the plantation
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plantation
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plantations
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, they
also
 can eat the pest and insects that
are prejudice
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 it, at the same time we would not need to use large amounts of pesticides to protect
it
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. In conclusion, humans and the earth need
the
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animals for our survival and evolution
in
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this
planet
, they are
also
 an important aspect to help us
into helping
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planet
 Earth with climates changes. Animals are more than just food, they are
also
 part of the place we call home,
therefore
, we should protect
instead
 of
eliminate
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 them.
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