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Some people believe that unpaid community service some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays free public service has been an important topic. Some
people
 think free public service must be a obligation in a part of the high
school
 schedule
for example
 working for a charity, helping older
people
 or teaching sports to the younger generation. I agree that these kinds of applications must be obligatory for high
school
 learners.
Firstly
 being a collective is a very important issue. Nowadays
people
 don't help each other enough. If the government makes it compulsory for high
school
. Students learn it at very earlier ages. Being a good and sensitive society is very crucial.
People
 should help the
people
 who need it ,
moreover
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 some
people
 really need help if we don't help them who is going to help us when we need help?
Secondly
 when we help somebody we really feel like a human.
People
 only exist when he or she part of the same society. For ,example when I help somebody I really feel alive.
Thirdly
 helping somebody benefits our psychology so much. When I feel down I try to help other
people
 it increases my mood. On the other ,hand forcing
people
 into
this
 kind of issue sometimes can be harmful to their educational program. Every student should have freedom of choice. We have to let
people
 choose what they want,
furthermore
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 if the government decides what to do for high
school
 they decide for every citizen In conclusion, free public service must be obligatory because being a collective is very crucial.
Also
 to feel like a human is really important,
lastly
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 its psychological effect is
also
 very important.
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