some people think that children should be taught at school how to become good parents.Do you agree or disagree?

Schools
are considered the home of knowledge.Youngsters can get information related to every aspect of life
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therefore
some individuals assume that students should be learnt about the how they could be
an ideal parent
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an ideal parent parent
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parents
in
schools
. I fully disagree with
this
fact, because a child's is mind not capable to understand
such
types of studies.
First
and foremost,individuals assume that
schools
should recognise a subject related to how to become a noble guardian.At an earlier
age
,students minds were not capable to understand
such
types of serious topics.Immature behaviour always resists to them to get knowledge about the parent's responsibilities.
Moreover
,It would be better if children get to know about how to become a good human
being
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beings
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in their academic sessions.For ,example many countries
such
as India,Australia always reserve a subject about a good human being in the education system,because a person with a noble personality can
also
be good
parents
parents
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in their mature life.
In addition
to it,the appropriate time to be
parents
is considered as 23 years of a normal human being,which is the
age
of maturity.After the
age
of 23,they have enough time to learn about how they can be good parent
parents
.
Schools
should be related to sports education.
Lastly
,
parents
can
also
give them some important tips related to being a good guardian,for
that students
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that student
those students
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should not rely on
schools
. In the conclusion, learning about becoming
good
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a good
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father is
also
an important part of life.I fully disagree with it,that
this
topic should be discussed in
schools
,
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because at
young
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a young
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age
they cannot understand
such
type of serious topics and it would be considered as a waste of time.
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