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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

#plane #journey #businessman #chain #restaurants #contact #job
Dear Mr Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to you to remind our meeting on a flight journey from Canada to Italy on September 18th and I sat
next
 to you. You were coming back to Italy after
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 inaugural ceremony of your new restaurant
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 Canada. I was on a call with my friend and you offered me your business card after hearing my discussion with my friend about finding a job in a restaurant. I took a break to complete my
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 to ameliorate my skills and getting expertise in my work. I learnt to cook
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 cuisines in my new post-graduation course training and I was keen fascinated to join as a chef in an alleged cafe. As
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 I reviewed your all food chains on the internet and found that you were looking for an expert chef having good efficiency in making
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 food items; it made me more interested to approach you. Recently,
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 completed my post-graduation in hotel management in one of the reputed universities of Australia. I had been working in a reputed cafeteria for 5 years as an executive chef
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 Canada, before that I worked as a supervisor in a retail shop. I am appropriate for
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 job as I meet your desires for the brasserie - perhaps as a sous-chef. I have a good vision
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 supervising and handling the customers’ requirements. I look forward to a positive consideration of my request. Yours sincerely, Veera James

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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