1.Influence of human being in the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary cause of loss of bio-diversity? What solution can you suggest?

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Nowadays, human expansion can have a bad impact on decreasing animal

habitat

and it can endanger their population.

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essay aims to give the primary cause of

this

and

also

put toward for solution. The important factor why bio-diversity has been lost from time to time is

due to

climate change. That situation has led to changing ecosystems that have an impact on other natural behaviours. Climate change’s effect on changing seasons from dry to rainy has shifted from the past and currently can cause some areas to lack water in the dense forest that can cause animals and vegetation who live there to get dry and threaten their existence.

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, when Kalimantan rain forests become drought, some Orang Utans will come to local civilians and ask for water. Government can do various

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things to preserve

natural

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habitat

of bio-diversity. They can build

conservation

centers

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to control and manage several species that need to get more supervision.

This

conservation

can make flora and fauna live in a place that has similar conditions to their natural

habitat

Moreover

, the expert and veterinarian

also

take an essential part in the

conservation

center, since they will support and take care of the condition of the species that need to

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. An impact of the

conservation

benefit is seen in, the Orang Utan

conservation center’s

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success in teaching

orang utan

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Orang Utan

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about survival needs for their continuity of life in the forest as a preparation when they adult and ready to back to their

habitat

. In conclusion, the reason behind the decrease in bio-diversity is mostly climate change

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and possible solutions are building

conservation

centers

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and having support from

the

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experts to supervise

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the endangered flora and fauna.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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286 words

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1.Influence of human being in the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary cause of loss of bio-diversity? What solution can you suggest?

Fully explain your ideas

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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

You are due to start new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employeer. In your letter: •Explain your situation •Describe your problems •Tell him or her when you think you can start.