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1.Influence of human being in the world ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary cause of loss of bio-diversity? What solution can you suggest?

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Nowadays, human expansion can have a bad impact on decreasing animal
habitat
 and it can endanger their population.
This
 essay aims to give the primary cause of
this
 and
also
 put toward for solution. The important factor why bio-diversity has been lost from time to time is
due to
 climate change. That situation has led to changing ecosystems that have an impact on other natural behaviours. Climate change’s effect on changing seasons from dry to rainy has shifted from the past and currently can cause some areas to lack water in the dense forest that can cause animals and vegetation who live there to get dry and threaten their existence.
For example
, when Kalimantan rain forests become drought, some Orang Utans will come to local civilians and ask for water. Government can do various
of
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things to preserve
natural
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habitat
 of bio-diversity. They can build
conservation
centers
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 to control and manage several species that need to get more supervision.
This
conservation
 can make flora and fauna live in a place that has similar conditions to their natural
habitat
.
Moreover
, the expert and veterinarian
also
 take an essential part in the
conservation
 center, since they will support and take care of the condition of the species that need to
managed
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. An impact of the
conservation
 benefit is seen in, the Orang Utan
conservation center’s
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 success in teaching
orang utan
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 about survival needs for their continuity of life in the forest as a preparation when they adult and ready to back to their
habitat
. In conclusion, the reason behind the decrease in bio-diversity is mostly climate change
,
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 and possible solutions are building
conservation
centers
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 and having support from
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experts to supervise
on
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the endangered flora and fauna.
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