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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, teenagers who have been living in developed countries have more
stress
instead
 of the previous generation.
This
 is a crystal clear situation. The concept of living is more stressful than
last
 before and hard. In
this
 essay, I would like to provide more detail from my perspective. First of all, the population of the world has increased. The rising population parallel to human needs brings some issues.
For instance
, the cost of living has been growing day by day. If we compare our previous standard of living with the present, Nowadays, we have more opportunities. Of course, opportunities came with some
stress
.
To begin
 with, today's youth have better education. They have many different schools. In the modern world, every individual has their own computer and internet network. They can
research
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 the knowledge easily which they want.
However
, They have to do more study compared to before generation. As I mentioned before, the number of folks has increased. Previously, cost of the living was less so, and our natural
sources
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resources
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 were more than now. Humans were feeding more healthily because they had organic fruit and nutrition.
According to
 investigators, the quality of the nutrition can bring some issues. Anxiety is significantly rising in today's world. People who are living present day tend to feel more
stress
. At
this
 point, İndivuduals should find a way from
stress
.
To sum up
, There is tremendous innovation and change compared to previously.
This
 would bring some negative effects but we should think about how can we turn benefits. One of the main steps which should be done is to notice our opportunities. I firmly believe that our future will be more restful.
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