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The graphs show the size of the Ozone layer hole in Antarctic and three productions of damaged gases to the Antarctic Ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show the size of the Ozone layer hole in Antarctic and three productions of damaged gases to the Antarctic Ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph
illustarates
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illustrates
 the
size
 of
Ozone
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the Ozone
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Layer
Hole
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in Hole
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Antarctic
 and
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the productions
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productions
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production
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 of damaged gases from 1980 to 2000. We can see from the first line graph that the
number of
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apply
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size
 of 
Antarctic
Ozone
Layer
Hole
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Holes
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 fluctuated from 1980 to 2000. More specifically, the
size
 of
Antarctic
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the Antarctic
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Ozone
Layer
Hole
 from 1980 to 1982 kept almost unchanged, around 45 square
kilometers
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kilometres
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. From 1982 on, there appeared a steady rise
of
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in
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size
, which amounted to 200 square
kilometers
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kilometres
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 in 1992,the highest point 
during
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apply
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in the square. It is manifest from the
second
 line chart that H2O2 was the most damaged
gases
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gas
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 in 1985, which 
product
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produced
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 200 metric tonnes
in
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apply
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1985. From 1980 to 1990,H2 and H2...11 kept almost
unchaged
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unchanged
, around 0 and 100 metric tonnes respectively.
However
, from 1985 to 2000 the H2O2 
was gradually decrease
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was gradually decreased
was gradually decreasing
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 until 
disappear
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disappeared
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. The H2 and H2...11,
on the other hand
, showed an upward trend, overtaking that of H2 in 1996 and that of H2..11in 1993.
What
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It
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 was
also
mentioning
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mentioned
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 that as the H2O2 
to reduce
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reduced
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, the
size
 of
Antarctic
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the Antarctic
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Ozone
Layer
Hole
 
were
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 showed an upward trend from 1995 to 2000
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words size, ozone, layer, hole, antarctic, h with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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