IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #population #figures #japan #summarise #features #comparisons
The graph illustrates the
population
 of
Japan
 in various
years
 between 1950 to 2055.
In addition
 to the line
graph
Add a comma
,graph
show examples
 there
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
statistical
Add an article
a statistical
the statistical
show examples
comparison
Fix the agreement mistake
comparisons
show examples
 of aged
people
 above 65
years
. As per data, there are
population
 counts recorded for every 5
years
staring
Correct your spelling
starting
show examples
 from 1950 and predicted till the
future
year
 2055. In 1950
Japan
Change noun form
Japan's
show examples
population
 was 84.1
million
. From 1950
population
Correct article usage
the population
show examples
 grows 4-5
million
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
every 5
years
 till 1970. In 1975 there are significant growth and ended in 111.9
million
. After 1970 there are gradual growth till
present
Correct article usage
the present
show examples
year
.
Japan
also
 predicated
population
 for
future
years
,
according to
 the data the
population
 will fall to 89.9
million
 in the
year
 2055.
In
Change preposition
On
show examples
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
other hand
Change the wording
another hand
other hands
show examples
, there were records for aged
people
 above 65
years
. In
year
Change the article
the year
show examples
 1950, 4.1
million
 senior citizens with a percentage of 4.9%. In 2005 it grows
till
Change preposition
to
show examples
 20% with 25.7
million
people
. As per
future
 data, it will grow
upto
Correct your spelling
up to
 41% aged
people
 over 65
years
 with 36.5
million
. In conclusion,
Japan
Change noun form
Japan's
show examples
 total
population
 will fall in
future
years
whereas
aged
Correct article usage
the aged
show examples
people
population
 will be increased.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words population, japan, years, people, future, year, million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: