The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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top
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10
countries
producing and consuming
electricity
in 2014.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that China and the US are the two
countries
that consume the most
electricity
. And Germany, which has more
electricity
consumption
than
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production
. At first glance, China registered for the first position with about 5400
billion
kWh
generated and 5322
billion
kWh
consumed. The
second
place belonged to the United States with
the
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electricity
production
of nearly 4100
billion
kWh
and
consumption
of 1038
billion
kWh
. And the
third
place was Russia with
production
and
consumption
figures of 1057
billion
kWh
and 1038
billion
kWh
. The
next
positions in turn belonged to Japan with 936.2 for
production
and 856.7
kWh
for
consumption
.
Next
was India and Canada accounted for the 5th and 6th position, India generated 871
billion
kWh
and used nearly 700
kWh
,
while
the country of maple leaves was significantly lower with 618.9
billion
kWh
of
production
and nearly 500
kWh
of
consumption
. France and Brazil registered for the 7th and 8th, both
countries
had the figure of
electricity
generation was around 530
billion
kWh
and 460
kWh
used. In the end, the two
countries
ranked the lowest were Germany and
Republic
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of Korea, with
the
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production
and
consuming
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of Germany
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526
billion
kWh
and 582.5
kWh
, respectively. And 485
billion
kWh
of generating and 449.5 of using was the figure of Korea.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity, consumption, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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