Some people say that increasing business and cultural contacts between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The

world

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today is characterized by the free flow of information and

commodity

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. The frequent interaction and growing interdependence among countries have ended the days of regional isolation and absolute national sovereignty, but they have

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heated controversies over the positive and negative impacts that a global

culture

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can bring into our

life

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lives

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. Some

people

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say that the widening international exchanges, both in the field of business and

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, have exerted positive influences

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a nation

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its

people

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with, they promote business cooperation among nations.

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, large multinational companies spread the latest technologies and experience around the

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, and international trade has helped

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many

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economies grow.

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, they enrich

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’s lives because

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of one nation are given opportunities through international tourism,

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and fairs, TV programmes and films, etc. to enjoy the achievements of other cultures across the globe.

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, other

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argue that these conditions

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create the possible danger of undermining a country’s national identity. In the first place, traditional cultures might fall victim

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global media and entertainment force.

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most evident in some parts of the

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where “Americanisation” is threatening the preservation of their indigenous

culture

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. In

Viet Nam

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for instance

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, few youngsters like or understand “Hue Court Music”, the quintessence of Vietnamese

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; they go for Hollywood movies and rock music

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, in the process of globalization, the

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is getting less linguistically diverse, as a growing number of

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give up their native language for the dominant language in the

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– English. From my point of view, both arguments are the true reflections of the possible

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increasing economic and cultural interaction among nations. It boosts economic integration and speeds up modernization but

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creates tensions between global

culture

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and a country’s national identity.

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, we should take the initiative in fighting to protect our distinct

culture

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and identity from being submerged by other cultural or economic influences.

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coherence cohesion

The logical structure of the essay is weak. The ideas are not presented in a clear and organized manner. You should work on organizing your ideas and presenting them in a logical order.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are not well-developed. The introduction should provide a clear overview of the main points and the conclusion should summarize the main ideas and provide a final thought. You should work on improving the introduction and conclusion.

task achievement

The essay lacks specific examples to support the main points. You should provide more specific and relevant examples to back up your arguments.

task achievement

The essay provides clear and comprehensive ideas throughout. You have addressed the prompt and presented a balanced view of the positive and negative impacts of increasing business and cultural contacts between countries.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

333 words

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Some people say that increasing business and cultural contacts between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many retired people today are choosing to live in other countries. What are the advantages or disadvantages of this?

In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on individualism, with people prioritizing their personal goals and desires over collective interests. Is this is a positive or negative development?

Some people argue that if children behave badly, their parents should accept responsibility and also be punished for the behavior of their children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Evil, wicked, spoiled.

Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?