The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
We see the graph below that summarizes the proportion of 65+ ages (say, elderly in short) in
general
population between three different countries beginning from the Add an article
the general
1940’s
and up to Fix apostrophe usage
1940s
2040’s
. Fix apostrophe usage
2040s
USA
showed with a black line, SwedenCorrect article usage
The USA
,
showed with Green and Japan with the red one. When we look at the graph we see that in the early years of twenty Remove the comma
apply
Fix the agreement mistake
century
centuries
the percentage of elderly people close Add a comma
,centuries
between
each country, Change preposition
to
ranged
between five to ten Change the form of the verb
ranging
percentages
. Replace the word
per cent
At the end
of the sixties
there is a trend to increase Add a comma
,sixties
on
Change preposition
in
this
proportion at
Change preposition
in
USA
and Sweden Correct article usage
the USA
while
Japan seems contrast
Fix the infinitive
to contrast
of
it. Change preposition
apply
Whereas
this
increasing
continues till Replace the word
increase
80s
for those two countries, Japan continues Change the article
the 80s
on
almost the same range (between less than 5 Change preposition
in
percentages
to Replace the word
per cent
near
10) through Change the word
nearly
the
2020. Another stroke seems for the USA at the beginning of Change the article
apply
2020’s
. Fix apostrophe usage
2020s
After
2020 to 2040 all Change preposition
From
of
three countries’ Change preposition
apply
population
Fix the agreement mistake
populations
of
65+ aged regularly Change preposition
apply
increasing
, too.Wrong verb form
increased
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