These days, it is easier than ever for people to travel to different places. As a result, many locations that used to be free of tourists have now become popular tourist destinations.

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A highly controversial issue in the contemporary world today relates to whether Tourists should be adventurous and travel to niche
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to gain a sense of spiritual satisfaction and the thrill of the experience.A section of the population felt that
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was an unwise move. In
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essay, I am going to examine the stated question from both points of view.and Later explain Why is it that in today's well-connected
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we can go anywhere we want, but I still discourage going to
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that are niche or hardly anyone has been there. First and foremost ,
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we did not know the local environment, facilities, climate and humanities, we rushed into the trip, and even though we made a plan in advance, it was not enough to deal with the unexpected situation.To be more specific ,Very few people go to
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, there are
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fewer natural strategies on the Internet, there is no formation of tourist attractions ,
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there will not be perfect tourist facilities, once we encounter difficulties during the trip, by virtue of our own ability is no way to solve,
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these injuries to our lives is irreversible. If we must be paranoid to do some risky behaviour,
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we will bear serious physical and mental injuries,
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the loss caused to the family,
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risky behaviour is more than worth the loss.
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China's National Bureau of Statistics, as many as 8,000 citizens will die in accidents
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travelling in 2020, which is one in 100,000 total travellers, and if everyone travels to
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where few people go, the danger level will increase by multiple. We can hardly afford it because of road trips. Some people claim that it's a cool thing to go to
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where no one goes, and I couldn't agree with him more, but it's not worth the cost of life to accomplish
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cool thing, it's pointless. In the end,each coin has two sides,depending on personal considerations.But I strongly believe that travelling to some safe spots is the right thing to do.
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