Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Competition
is
present in human lives since always. Some people argue that the competitive behaviour of Wrong verb form
has always been
male
gender is more natural than the other gender. As I see it, I partly agree with the statement and Correct article usage
the male
this
essay will elaborate more.
First of all, history can show that men
were those who must have
to prove themselves competitively. Wrong verb form
had
Whereas
women’s tasks were taking care of children and being housewives, men
should provide food, safety and respect for their families. As a result
, they normally have to compete between themselves for land or honour, or just to demonstrate which man was the strongest to be the leader or the chief. Therefore
, I agree that historically, men
have been carrying this
aptitude or even veiled responsibility to
competitiveness. Change preposition
for
Furthermore
, until
these days, even in the workplace, it is common to see Change preposition
apply
men
competing to prove who is more capable or has a bigger salary.
However
, as far as I am concerned, this
can be explained by a lack of opportunities for women. In the past,they were not allowed to participate in competitive events and dispute positions just because of their sex. Differently, nowadays every sport that allows men
to show their grandiosity,
Remove the comma
apply
also
has space for the other gender and sometimes, the latter have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
uppermost
results, proving that the fragile sex is just an older and prejudiced term. Correct article usage
the uppermost
For instance
, Marta, a Brazilian soccer player, has won more “Ballon D'or
” than any other man alive. Correct your spelling
d'Or
Hence
, it is just a matter of equality and opportunities, which was unthinkable decades ago, to women prove their value
To conclude
, although
I agree that it is possible to relate a greater sense and disposition to competitiveness to men
due to
the history and their positions in the past, I can not ignore the fact that women are pursuing their own space and proving in numbers and attitude that they can be equally or even more competitive than them.Submitted by gusttmarquez on
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